Halopen output
“"By the time the bus pulled into Charlevoix the snow had stopped and the sky was that color it gets in March, the color of a thing that hasn’t decided what it’s going to be. Margot stepped down with her duffel and looked around like the town was a question she was being asked to answer. She didn’t answer it. She pulled the cigarette out of her pocket, looked at it for a long time, then put it back."”
- · Atmospheric scene-setting preserved
- · "the color of a thing that hasn’t decided what it’s going to be" — exact aphoristic phrasing landed
- · Character action ("looked at it for a long time, then put it back") captured precisely
- · Voice consistent across paragraph